Some people say that the government should not put money on building theatres and sports stadiums. They should spend more money on medical care and education. Do you agree or disagree?

Government
in
one
country, has a
lot
of
program
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programs
that must be done used
state
budget
. Usually,
one
country has
state
budget
, we call
APBN
in Indonesia, that represent the
budget
that used by
government
to funding all programs in
one
year. There are a
lot
of programs, in economic, sports, health,
education
and humanities. All of these programs being funded by
state
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the state budget
budget
. Each of
program
has their own post on that
state
budget
. It is true that each
program
is important, but, the
government
always has their priorities. In
one
year
state
program
, some programs,
for example
, economics and
education
have a majority proportion
in
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of
government's
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the government's budget
budget
. So in my opinion, I agree that
government
must spend more money on medical care and
education
. Medical care, like BPJS in Indonesia, is really important to keeping the citizen's health. Same as medical treatment,
education
usually being preference too in our
government
's
program
. So, they usually put a
lot
of portion in the
budget
's
state
.
For example
, in Indonesia,
education
being
one
of
program
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the program
a program
that has most a
lot
of proportion in
APBN
, the proportion is approximately 20% of
APBN
, it's pretty much. In another way, we can't forget about other programs. Like building theatres and sports stadiums. These two timetables, usually, were not a priority for
government
budget
, but it is always having portions in
state allocation
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the state allocation
state allocations
.
Government
usually spends money on building theatres and a sports
stadium
if there is a special agenda,
such
as sport's calender, like ASEAN GAMES, SEA GAMES, or PON, or maybe more big event like Olympic. If there is a big calender that would
held
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hold
in
one
country, like Olympic or ASEAN GAMES,
then
government
would spend a
lot
of sport
budget
to prepare that event. In that case,
government
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the government
, will build new
stadium
and fix the old
stadium
. These all
stadium
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stadiums
will completed by the newest accommodations. At the end, we can say that
government
usually has priority on spending their money. It's covered all of their programs, but they always have arrangement too. Usually, especially in Indonesia, medical care and
education
will be prioritized so these two programs have the biggest portion too in
APBN
. But, sports and art are important too, so
budget
for building
stadium
and theatres were important too, but not being prime concern.

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