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Your local newspaper is experiencing low sales of its newspapers since many readers are now choosing the online version. Its current number of online subscribers is now three times the number of print subscribers. The newspaper has sent a survey to all of its print and online subscribers to see whether there is enough demand to keep the print version.

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I would like to say to keep print
version
 and
also
 develop the online
version
 because both of them have
supporter
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a supporter
. Nowadays, with the development of internet. Surf the net became a lifestyle in our daily life. The online
version
for
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of
 the newspaper can provide
the most convenience
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the most convenient
 way for us to get
the new
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the newest
 information about the world. We can get the news everywhere with our laptop, iPad. The most important thing is it can protect the
environment save
Accept comma addition
environment, save
more tree
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more trees
, reduce the waste.
This
 online
version
 obviously will be a trend of the lifestyle in the future.
Although
 the online
version
have
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has
 many
advantage
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advantages
, but as a company they take care of every person in the society. We still have many old
person
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people
persons
 who unable to use the computer or other
eletronic
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
 devices. But they still need to get information from the world. We can not regardless of them. They have right to get the news. I will suggest that to control the weight between
print
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the print version
version
 and
online
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the online version
version
 to let everyone to choose their lifestyle.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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