The graph below show how elderly people in Europe spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

The graph below show how elderly people in Europe spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.
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The graph illustrates changes in
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old people in Europe spent their free time in a period of three decades from 1980 to the present. In general, most
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the
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activities
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have been increasingly popular with playing
sport
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being the top choice among elderly people in Europe
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most of the time. In the 1980s, almost all
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were increasing in terms of popularity, with the exception of going to the
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.
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activity saw a decrease from 50% to 30%. In the
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ten years,
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, reading dipped and hit a low in popularity, from 40% to only 20%.
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, going to the
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and other
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increased. From 2000 onwards, nearly all
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have been growing in popularity. Noticeably, hiking has overtaken playing
sport
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to become the most
favored
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choice with 80% of
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people. The number of senior citizens who play
sport
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has been decreasing,
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it still comes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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