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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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It is true that advancements in
technology
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 have changed the way we interact with one another. 
Technology
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 has affected relationships in various ways, and in my opinion, there are both positive and negative effects. There are several ways in which the new
communication
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technology
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 has influenced
people
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’s way of
interaction
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 with each other.
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, social
media
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applications
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 have revolutionized the way we communicate. The reason why many
people
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 believe
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 is that nowadays, you can connect with your family and friends instantly through many social
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applications
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 as
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Facebook and
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applications
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. It is
also
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 possible to say that
people
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 are now more encouraged to share their opinions openly via the Internet. One good illustration
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this
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 is the substantial number of friends that
people
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 who use social
media
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applications
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 have in their contact list.
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, the impact of social
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in
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 one’s social life may not always be positive.
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 is because
people
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 are now increasingly abandoning
face to face
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interactions and prefer carrying out their
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 behind closed doors.
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 is causing more
people
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, especially youths, to lose out on  many aspects of personal
communication
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. A particularly good example here is a study conducted in the USA showing that more than 75% of high school students are spending more than 50% of their free time on the Internet. In conclusion,
technology
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 has certainly revolutionized
communication
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 between
people
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, but not all of the outcomes of
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 revolution have been positive.
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