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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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It has become a trend nowadays, to take a one
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 gap after completing
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 and joining university. Taking a
year
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 off after
school
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 and getting to university helps students to take a break from their schedule and get time to take decision about their career. On the one hand, a
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 off after
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 buys some time to the students from their hectic schedule and take a break to relax and enjoy.
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 helps them to rejuvenate and get ready for the upcoming challenges and decisions to do for their careers.
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, the student gets time to analyse all the aspects of the profession they want to choose and getting familiar with the subject,
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 gives them a feedback that are they really interested or should change their decisions.
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, they can make the list of universities and checking on the prospectus, and choose the subjects as well as the universities.
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, taking a
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 off between the
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 and educational institution, students lose a precious period, which can be
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 utilized later as experience.
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 to
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, they face difficulty in getting back to studies and can lose confidence. Due to the gap in studies, it becomes difficult to concentrate. Another issue that can arise from
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 is that they are behind their fellow batch mates in their colleges which can lead to low self-esteem and depression. In conclusion, taking a gap between
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 and university makes it difficult to get back to studies and
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 lose a precious term, but there are advantages too.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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