Mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries and shops and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is widely believed that
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as libraries, supermarkets, or on means of public transport. Linking Words
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argument for several reasons.
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, some universities and libraries require students to check in online on their mobile Linking Words
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public places, others might feel bothersome because they can not have a quiet atmosphere to concentrate. Linking Words
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people
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as vehicles and chatting noise. Meanwhile, some negative effects may happen if local or national authorities ban the Linking Words
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This
action could help the community avoid Linking Words
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severe consequences. There is a piece of convincing evidence to say that the Linking Words
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public areas is necessary.
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use
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as education, transport, and technology and in emergency cases.Linking Words
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structure
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite