The bar chart shows the number of male and female people arrested by type of offence

The bar chart shows the number of male and female people arrested by type of offence
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows the number of male and female people arrested by type of offence
The bar chart gives information about the proportion of arrested people between genders by offence type in 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the number of violence against people had the highest
rate
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in both genders,
whereas
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robbery was the least
rate
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. Among men, 31%
arrested
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were arrested
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for violence against
the
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a
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person
and
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which
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was about
three-halves
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three halves
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times as high as the
rate
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of men committing theft and handling stolen goods. Crimes
such
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as criminal damage, drug offences or other offences among
male
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males
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were 10%, 8%,
15
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and 15
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%, respectively- these figures are 2% higher than
female
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females
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for all three types of crime. The percentage of males arrested by robbery and burglary
were
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was
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twice as high as that of females. In 2008/09, there were 3 types of crime that were more prevalent in females than in males
such
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as violence against the person; theft and handling stolen goods; fraud and forgery.
Whereas
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,
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only approximately 2% of women were arrested for robbery, it was
also
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the lowest
rate
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among female offence groups.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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