The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates, how
much
Correct quantifier usage
many
the
people travelled by train (National Correct article usage
apply
rail
network, London underground, Light rail
and metro system) in the UK from 1950 to 2004/5.
Overall
, the National Rail
Network carried a higher number
of passengers than the other two systems from the commencing with the last
and the rate was fluctuated
over the period.
Change to the active voice
fluctuated
However
, in 1950, a
Correct article usage
the
number
of passengers of
Change preposition
on
National
Correct article usage
the National
rail
network were 1000 million
and, therefore
, the number
was
slightly increased and reach Unnecessary verb
apply
the
peak Correct article usage
a
to
around 1100 Change preposition
at
million
in 1960. After that sudden decrease was demonstrated with slight fluctuation and it declined to 700 million
during 1980. Then
, the number
was gradually risen
and in 2004/5 Change to the active voice
gradually rose
has gradually risen
number
of travellers was Correct article usage
the number
approximately
Replace the adverb
approximate
to
900 Change preposition
apply
million
. Similarly
, the rate of tourists in the subway was 700 million
and it showed the
Correct article usage
apply
leveled
off with some ups and downs till 1970 and Change the spelling
levelled
then
it decreased to 500 million
after one decade. Change the spelling
Afterwards
Afterward
the rate Add a comma
,Afterward
was
sharply escalated to 800 Unnecessary verb
apply
million
during the 1990s which showed similar
point Add an article
the similar
a similar
of
the 1st railway system Change preposition
to
thereafter
after some fluctuation it reached the top point at the end
of the period. On the contrary
, although
the light train and metro system was started from
1965 and only a few Change preposition
in
million
people use it in the beginning, the number
of passengers was rising over the period.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rail, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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