More and more people want to buy famous brands with clothes, car and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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of purchasing well-known items is rapidly growing and being concerned

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state of affairs can be ascribed to a several reasons and I believe it is a welcome development. There are several

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people prefer to buy luxury products

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, nowadays many items

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from which they can enjoy the satisfaction and excited.

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, from buying the international brands bring them a superior quality goods than their national and along with

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is can be seen a way people can express their individuality and monetary

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normal people to buy these expensive things feel confident

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brings a lot of advantages to individuals and society

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reason is the trade between the nations if the particular brands are needed in any other

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a demand is higher and higher that companies will aim to introduce raise so many new factories or industry from there it will definitely give a boost to economy as well as the employment rate in that country. And the

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phenomenon is make the personality improved and promote a positive lifestyle to suitable with a fashion brands are sworn. To inclusion ,

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but in my personality I assume the advantages of

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is outweigh to the disadvantages

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