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In some countries the number of children aged 15 and younger are increasing dramatically. what are the current and future effects of an ever-increasing population?

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Todays
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,
most
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in most
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 countries proportion of teenagers
have
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has
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 dramatic growth.
this
 phenomenon will undoubtedly have some short-term impacts on education.
Although
,
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 serious problems
arisen
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as a result
 of
this
 in the future, steps can be taken to mitigate these potential problems.
To begin
 with,
in
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at
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 present increasing the number of under 15 fifteen years children,
require
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requires
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 to
develop
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educational
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of educational
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 infrastructure like teachers, schools and other facilities.
This
 means,
the
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 governments should spend a huge part of the public budget for tackling
this
 issue. So, the level of lifestyle will fall and the rate of taxes will increase.
Moreover
, the number of schools
are
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 limited and parents find it difficult to register their children in the class.
Besides
,
as a result
 of
increasing
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the increasing
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children
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number of children
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 in families, some of them will deprived of
from
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education and have to work from an early age. Considering the future effects of
this
 trend, undoubtedly
leads
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lead
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 to unemployment and social obstacles.
Firstly
, most
of
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youngsters who are ready to
absorb
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be absorbed
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by
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into
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workforce
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the workforce
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 cannot find a career and
encourage
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are encouraged
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 to commit crimes.
Finding
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 shows the rate of crimes in countries which have more job seekers
are
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 higher compared with others.
In addition
, in
this
 situation, most
of
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young people tend to immigrate
to
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abroad and it is a threat to the economy because after a
while
 source country
face
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faces
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lack
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a lack
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 of
the
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 labour pool. In conclusion,
elevation
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an elevation
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 in the number
youngsters
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of youngsters
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 may lead to some hardships in present and in the long run.
This
 threat can be changed into an opportunity by allocating enough resources to education and instructions.

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coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases more effectively to improve flow between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
The essay attempts to address both current and future effects of an increasing population of young children.
coherence cohesion
The essay starts with an introduction and ends with a conclusion, showing an effort to structure the argument.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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