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In many countries, traditional food is replaced by international fast food. This has adverse effect families, individuals and society. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is comprehensively acknowledged that the availability of international foods has risen
significantly which
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significantly, which
 causes many more people do not consume traditional foods. I firmly disagree because
this
 is detrimental both for individuals who consume it and society in general. There are two primary reasons to support
this
.
First
 and foremost, it is an undeniable fact that consuming fast foods to excess results in serious health problems. Fast foods
such
 as fried chickens, hamburgers, and chips- which incredibly high in salt and fat are responsible for
such
 ailments as high blood pressure, high level of cholesterol, obesity even heart disease.
Further
 and more importantly, some international
foods
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food
 chain
deliberately attempt
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deliberately attempts
 to attract children to shape their eating habits. One
particularly
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particular
 example of
this
 is the character of Ronald McDonalds. The bright clothes and smiles are clearly designed to attract kids who push their parents to take them to McDonald's restaurants. Having grown up eating in the restaurants, people are more likely to continue eating there throughout their adult lives. Another frequent criticism of consuming convenience foods is decreasing the value of local foods. Every region has its specific food
specialty
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Specialty
. With the introduction of international foods and fast foods, they are more likely to disappear. In
this
 way, the local communities will face
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 impacts in terms of losing their traditional value. By way of conclusion, even though fast foods are preferable due to their relatively low cost and convenience, I once again reaffirm that they are deleterious for people’s lives.
In other words
, they are beneficial in the short term, but the dangerous effects are predominant in later life.

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