In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying both in and after school, and have less free time. Do you think it has the positive or negative effects on children and society ?

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It's true that most of the parents'd rather their children spent more
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on studying and cut down free
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. While I accept that
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statement offers lots of benefits, I believe that it
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has several drawbacks. On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why studying both in and after school is positive for children.
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of all, knowledge is very valuable, so studying for a long
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will help children grow up better.
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, acquiring knowledge about some subjects at school
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as Sciences, Arts and especially English can bring more good opportunities to their future career. The
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reason is that spending less free
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means children can be restricted to overuse the Internet, which has detrimental implication on their physical and mental health. On the Internet, some violent and bad news can distort their way of thinking about families, friends and society.
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, paralleling with these conducive effects, learning too much without enough relaxing
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affect juveniles badly.
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, having less free
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can make them to develop unequally. They may have the lack of soft skill like communication skill or have butterflies in their stomach when speaking publicly.
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, they will find it difficult to adapt to the modern world.
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but not least, immersing themselves in studying may affect their feeling. In my high school, there was a girl killing herself due to
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after being overwhelmed with learning all day long. In conclusion, after weighing the pros and cons, I would say that juveniles should devote their
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to expand their knowledge and chill out appropriately.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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