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In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying both in and after school, and have less free time. Do you think it has the positive or negative effects on children and society ?

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It's true that most of the parents'd rather their children spent more
time
 on studying and cut down free
time
. While I accept that
this
 statement offers lots of benefits, I believe that it
also
 has several drawbacks. On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why studying both in and after school is positive for children.
First
 of all, knowledge is very valuable, so studying for a long
time
 will help children grow up better.
For instance
, acquiring knowledge about some subjects at school
such
 as Sciences, Arts and especially English can bring more good opportunities to their future career. The
next
 reason is that spending less free
time
 means children can be restricted to overuse the Internet, which has detrimental implication on their physical and mental health. On the Internet, some violent and bad news can distort their way of thinking about families, friends and society.
On the other hand
, paralleling with these conducive effects, learning too much without enough relaxing
also
 affect juveniles badly.
Firstly
, having less free
time
 can make them to develop unequally. They may have the lack of soft skill like communication skill or have butterflies in their stomach when speaking publicly.
As a result
, they will find it difficult to adapt to the modern world.
Last
 but not least, immersing themselves in studying may affect their feeling. In my high school, there was a girl killing herself due to
lypemania
 after being overwhelmed with learning all day long. In conclusion, after weighing the pros and cons, I would say that juveniles should devote their
time
 to expand their knowledge and chill out appropriately.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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