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Mobile phone usage is held responsible for a lot of medical, social and technical problems. What forms do these problems take? Do you agree that the problems outweigh the advantages offered by mobile phones? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
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 fast paced
world
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, technology plays an important role. One
such
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 invention is m
obile
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a mobile phone
the mobile phone
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. It seems that
cell
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 phones have taken over our modern
world
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. It is probably the most accepted and widely used communication devices than any other device of the past
time
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. Mobile phones cause many health related problems as well as s
ocial
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socially
and other p
roblems but
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problems, but
I completely disagree with the idea that it outweighs the benefits. Presently, technological advancements have made our lives easy and at the same
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 made the
cell
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 phones something more than a talking device. Today, with the help of a mobile
phone
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 we can easily talk or video chat with anyone across the globe by just moving our fingers. Apart from
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 it
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 keeps us updated about the whole
world
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. With the improvement in mobile technology, the whole entertainment
world
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 is now under one roof. We can do numerous activities when we get bored
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 as watching movies, listening to music and so on. Above all, a mobile
phone
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 act as a wallet for making payments which saves a lot of
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 and is
also
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 hassle free. As there are two sides to every coin.
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, there are certain adverse effects of using mobile phones.
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, drivers using
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phone
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 while driving is a common cause of accident. At the same
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, o
ver use
exploitation to the point of diminishing returns
overuse
of
cell
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phone
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 can cause many diseases from severe headache to incurable cancer. The easy access of
cell
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phone
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 has violated our privacy and helped the criminals to be more organised. In the nutshell, I would like to p
endown saying
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pen down, saying
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that those negative effects can be overcome if all of us become a little cautious and be aware of the negative issues of overuse of
cell
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 phones. I strongly opine that, mobile
phone
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 is a useful device to all of us and at the same
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 i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
disagree with the opinion that the problems outweigh the benefits.

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