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Housing is essential for people.some argue that the government should offer free housing for people who can not afford it.do you agree or disagree with this statement

#people #argue #government #offer
Housing is a primary need for everyone. Some of us think that housing should be offered by the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 to fulfil the rights but in another mindset it shouldn'
t
 be given free in a reason to make people more enthusiastic to occupy their needs. So in
this
 essay we would discuss about
this
, to see which argument is more relevant.
Goverment
Suggestion
The government
Government
 has their own duty to fulfil their people authorization. Most of us thought that housing shows the economic condition of a person. By having a house or a place to live and stay, show that the primary needs already attained.
Moreover
, when the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 won'
t
 help their people, that just show that the provincial is not well-develop because they don'
t
 think about their society welfare. Offering the house for free is being tolerant because the price for it is too high, so many of us can'
t
 afford for it. But if we see in another point of view, giving something free has been just like spoiling our own resource
(
Accept space
(
human is one rustic best resource). It would give some viewpoint to the society that they shouldn'
t
 have to go to work because they would get anything easily from the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
.
This
 perspective will lead the country to unstable economic condition.
This
 condition would detrimental the country. As we could see, each of the options has their own goods. The
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 must combine both of the idea to fulfil the rights and prosperity.
Therefore
, the best way to solve the problem, is to give some kind of discount that the refugees should give it back to the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
. So it would make any bad perspective in the society.
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