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The graph shows unemployment rates and average earnings according to level of education.

The graph shows unemployment rates and average earnings according to level of education.
#unemployment #rates #earnings #level #education
The given
graph's
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 illustrate a comparative study regarding not only the proportion of jobless
people
,
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 but
also
 their average earnings by education level in 2016.
Overall
, the highest percentage of jobless
people
who
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had
degree
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a degree
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 of
high
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a high
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 school
diploma
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diplomas
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,
whereas
 they
were
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earned
very
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 less amount of money.
However
, a graduate
degree
holder
 earned the highest
payment
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 with the least number of unemployment. As per the unemployment rate, the least proportion of
people
 who had graduated
degree
were
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was
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 jobless, that was 1.2
percent
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per cent
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.
Furthermore
, a
college
degree
 and some
college
degree
holder's
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holders
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 were unemployed, accounting for 2.50% and 4.20% respectively.
However
, 5.50% of high school diploma
holder
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holders
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 had the highest unemployment.
On the other hand
,
people
 earned 1,100 dollars who had a
college
degree
 and some
college
degree
holder
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holders
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 earned 675 dollars.
Besides
, the graduate
degree
holder
 earned the amount of money with $1,500.
In contrast
,
the
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less amount of money had been earned by high school diploma
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holders
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holder
, amounting to $600.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, degree, holder, college with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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