The chart above shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart above shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
The bar graph compares the percentage of different qualifications acquired by Australian males and females after graduating from school in 1999.
Overall
, out of five areas of study, the biggest discrepancy in
percentage
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of
men
and
women
was observed in
'Skilled
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Vocational Diploma' category,
whereas
the lowest gap was in Bachelor's
Degree
.
Although
females outnumbered males in Undergraduate Diploma and Bachelor's
Degree
qualifications, the other categories were dominated by
men
. It is evident that
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Vocational Diploma' was by far the most popular discipline of study chosen by
men
, comprising a hefty 90%. In stark contrast,
this
category was least popular among their female counterparts accounting for a mere 10
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- 9 times less.
However
, Bachelor's
Degree
was almost equally popular for either
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- around 45% and 50
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for
men
and
women
respectively. The figure for Masters and Postgraduate
degree
students did not show much difference regarding both genders, around 60-70 and 30-40 per cent for males and females respectively.
However
, a difference by half can be observed in Undergraduate Studies comparing
men
(about 35%) and their
women
counterparts (approximately 70%), which was the highest figure for
women
.

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