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Most people believe that stricter punishments should be given for traffic offences . To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #punishments #traffic #offences
There is no doubt that in recent years
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 road
safety
 is becoming an increasing concern, alongside
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its
 subsequent rise in traffic offences. I agree with the majority that
such
 offenders should be faced with strict penalties.
First
 and foremost, it is necessary to find alternative measures to punish minor offences
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like speeding, jaywalking and other violations. Studies have shown that a penalty by itself will not be adequate to deter
such
 circumstances from
further
 occurring in the future.
Instead
 of merely charging a fine, a court-ordered period of volunteering work will not only lead to their reformation, but would
also
 be useful for the betterment of society.
Conversely
, if
such
 offences were only met with a small punishment
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then
 people would not fear the consequences, and
thus
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 would not be adequately motivated to improve road
safety
.
Furthermore
, major offences should have
legislature
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legislated
that is
 strictly enforced in order to safeguard the streets. I believe that offences
such
 as driving under the influence, and
hit-and-run should
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hit-and-run, should
 be made non-bailable and these criminals should face
an
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a
 period of jail time. Less serious cases like rash driving should be threatened with suspension of license or even revoked depending on the type and number of misdemeanours.
As a result
, fewer people will be prone to accidents
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 thereby, improving the
safety
 of both the commuters and the pedestrians. To conclude, I believe that’s traffic violations should not only be met with fines, but
also
 with stricter punishments
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such
 as license suspension and jail terms to prevent a threat to the
safety
 of citizens.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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