Some people think that young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc.to serve Society.Discuss both views and give ur opinion

The issue of young development
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this
day and
age
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has triggered a new round of heated debate.Few people argue that young individuals should be sent to
university
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the university
for higher studies while some claim that they should be encouraged to help people by doing mechanical jobs like car mechanics
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builders etc.
Although
I support the former view
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both sides will be discussed in
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essay.
One
can earn money and become independent at a young
age
if they chose to work rather than studying.
Furthermore
,
one
should put physical effort in order to earn income and it teaches them how difficult it is
to make
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making
money making them realise the efforts of their parents.It
also
gives them many life experiences like how to talk to people
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how to establish relationships
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how to work smart etc.
For example
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my father started working at a very young
age
as a bus driver as his parents were financially weak and
couldnt
could not
couldn't
send my father to university
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he has gone through several hardships and has overcome all those struggles and made him an independent survivor at his
teen
being of the age 13 through 19
teenage
age
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On
the contrary, it is important for young individuals
to go
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go
to universities to lead a comfortable
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happy and a prosperous future.In
this
cut throat competitive world
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one
must have highly qualified education to get
into easy
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into, easy
jobs where
one
need not put much physical
efforts
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effort
.They should be endured to reach their ambitions and goals in order to achieve a life which they dreamt of.
For example
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my aim is to become a doctor and my parents have always supported me and have sent me to the university to pursue my medical degree. Though
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I
have started earning lately
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today
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
have become a doctor and
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I'm
able to serve people through my
proffesion
the body of people in a learned occupation
profession
by treating them which gives me immense satisfaction. To conclude,
one
can earn money and become independent at a young
age
by working as a car mechani
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without reserve; without reservation
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