In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it.

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In many nations, it has been noticed that major crimes have declined;

however

, still, people are scared and have a feeling of insecurity. In my opinion,

this

is happening due to the rapid use of social media handles and

this

problem could be solved with the help of government by controlling the public media. The major problem associated with individuals who are feeling insecure is the fast use of different media modes

such

as Facebook, Twitter and WhatsApp.

In other words

internet

users are making instant

crime

videos of the rape victim, homicide incidents and robberies and upload on social networking sites within seconds of time.

Therefore

, when other people watch

such

clips, they feel that these

type

Suggestion

types

of instances can occur any time; it creates a feeling of uncertainty and

fearfulness

Suggestion

fear

For example

, a recent shooting case happened in Punjab, a son killed the whole family, gone viral on the

internet

and after watching

this

news; people are scared in their homes across the world. To eradicate

this

problem, the government must control on media stakeholders who are producing and showing

such

kind of violent clips to the public.

This

is to say that there should be

ban

Suggestion

banned

and legal consequences

Suggestion

displaying

Suggestion

display

devastating

crime

events, which affect people’s thought related to their surroundings.

For example

, in many Arab countries, no one is allowed to capture and upload

crime

scenes on the

internet

as a result

, people do not get horror

crime

information and they feel more secure. In conclusion, even with the decline in serious

crime

rates, people feel less safe than past times due to an increase in

internet

users and the government can introduce rules and regulation in order to control the use of social media channels.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

fast food has become cheaper in recent years. do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Directors of organzations receive much higher salaries than ordinary workers. Some think it is necessary, while ther think it is unfair. Discuss both view and give your opinion.