The diagram below show how glass containers, such as bottles, are produced and recycled.
The diagram describes a process of how to manufacture and recycle
the
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containers. Overall
, the
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production has 4 steps to make raw materials into the product, which is the glass
container. While
the other, glass
recycling, need
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glass
into new products. At
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production, the process starts with 3 main raw materials: sand, soda ash, and limestone. These materials will be mixed together with
some chemicals to become a perfect mixture. This
mixture will be melted in a glass
furnace at approximately 1500•c. The next
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is blown into a permanent shape. Let the model cool down and the glass
container is completed. On the other hand
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recycling starts the process with the
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. These items were collected and sorted by color
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glass
was washed carefully in order to remove impurities like dust or dirt. After that, non-impurities glass
is crushed and melted. The
next
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is blown and molded
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