1. You are a parent and you need information about a school trip your child is going on. Write a letter to the class teacher. In your letter • introduce yourself • explain what information you are looking for • inform the teacher about any specific needs your child has

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Dear

Ms.

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Mona, I am Swastika Tusu, mother of your student Kistika Tusu, Grade II, Student No. 123456. I am writing to you in response to your notice regarding the school

trip

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Mountains on 6th May

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2020.

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with, apart from the information provided in the brochure regarding the

trip

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, I would like to get some more details on the same.

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, what is the main purpose of

this

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trip

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during

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time of the year?

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, as it is 3 days long

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, what essentials items should we pack for the

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, how many teachers and students in total are going for the

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? As you are already aware

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Kistika’s condition. She has a dietary requirement and cannot consume dairy and gluten.

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, she must take her supplementary tablets every night after dinner. Would it be of any inconvenience to your team

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the children on

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trip

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? I hope you will be able to help me resolve my queries. Please feel free to contact me if you need more information regarding Kistika. Yours sincerely, Swastika Shrestha

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

183 words

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1. You are a parent and you need information about a school trip your child is going on. Write a letter to the class teacher. In your letter • introduce yourself • explain what information you are looking for • inform the teacher about any specific needs your child has

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

The number of people who are overweight or obese is far higher than in previous generation. What are the reasons for this, and How this problem be tackled.

Some people think that reading stories in books is better than watching TV or playing games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that violent media directly results in violent behavior. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

What is your opinion on the impact of artificial lighting on wildlife

Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?