Please complete the personal statement IN YOUR OWN WORDS. You must submit the personal statement in English in the space provided below. Describe, in no more than 500 words, your reasons for applying for your chosen course of study and the ways in which you expect your study experience to make a difference to your life and those around you.

I have been interested in art and
design
since I was a child.
However
, here in Taiwan, if you can be an engineer or a doctor, you are encouraged to be one, and I am no exception. During my high school years, I was influenced by my peers, starting to change my
career
path to engineering. In 2016, I selected mechanical engineering as my major. It didn’t take me much
time
to realize that I was not good at the discipline I had chosen. Not knowing what I am capable of doing, nor do I know what I like, I could not be more lost and frustrated. Luckily, by the end of the semester, there was a
design
workshop drew my attention. Out of curiosity I signed it up. During the speech and activities, I felt something that I didn’t have while I studied engineering. It was the
first
time
that I felt the passion lay within my heart. In the following semester I selected a course related to
design
. As I dived down deeper it became apparent that
design
Suggestion
the design
is the field that I am good at.
However
, I struggled. Setting my
career
in
design
implies giving up the stable income and a smooth
career
path which staying in engineering guarantees. There is a voice inside telling me that I am supposed to follow my heart, but there are
also
many people think
this
is an absurd act. The two forces inside were tearing me apart, and under
this
situation my course performance only got worse. One day, it dawned on me that only if I do the things I like can I optimize my
career
development.
As a result
, I signed up for our school
design
program to help me broaden my horizon.
Although
studying engineering is difficult for me, I consider it as a challenge and a complementary support for my
design
.
Besides
learning through courses, combining what I had learned, I designed new products and joined in competitions. To challenge myself, I became a teaching assistant tutoring students in
design
. As a freelance graphic designer, I designed the logo and packaging for a foreign coffee shop. Still, even with all these experiences, it is still not enough for me. I want to test the limits and break through. Attending graduate school is a perfect opportunity to help me integrate all my skills better. It took me a long
time
to get myself prepared. To have my own portfolio, new products had to be designed, and there are so many
design
tools that I had to be familiar with. After two years of preparation,
last
Christmas I submitted my application. I can still remember the day I received the admission letter from California College of the Art. I woke up and check my smartphone as usual, and there was a notification popped up. For the
first
time
in my college years, I was
finally
relieved.

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