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Many people think it is important to protect the environment, but they make no effort on it themselves. Why it is so and what can be done about it?

#people #environment #effort
Pure
environment
 is necessary to stay healthy so most of people believe that to save the
environment
 is very important, but they do not do assiduity to protect it themselves as they do not the c
ause
an occurrence of something
case
but it should be done by taking some steps.
To begin
 with, there are some reasons why people n
ot try
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don't try
aren't trying
to make
e
nvironment
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environmentally
better.
Firstly
, people d
o not know
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does not know
they themselves are the main cause of environmental damage because they do not know b
y
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of
their daily activities they harm the
e
nvironment
Accept comma addition
environment, for
for example
, uses of cars and other vehicles more and m
ore cause pollution
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cause more pollution
in s
urroundings.
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the surroundings
Secondly
, they do not think enough about it because they are living i
n luxurious life
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luxurious life
like everyone use air conditioner to protect themselves from h
eat but
Accept comma addition
heat, but
they do not think that why they feel hot
environment
.
Moreover
, people believe that it is a global
problem
 and they c
an not
can not
cannot
do anything to solve it only government action can solve it. Some measure can be taken which help people, what can harm the
environment
 and what they can do.
First
 of all, awareness f
or
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of
e
nvironment
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the environment
should be spread among people and s
hould be educate
Suggestion
should educate
people about, how
e
nvironment
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the environment
can damage so, they do not use a
ny thing
an indefinite thing
anything
which is harmful for it.
Then
, people need to think themselves to regarding
this
problem
 like they have to think about upcoming generation.
In addition
, some strict rules and regulations should be made by government and action should be t
ake
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taken
if anyone t
ry
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tries
to damage the
environment
 by breaking the rules.
Furthermore
, w
hole world
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the whole world
should be united to take appropriate measures for
this
problem
 like m
ake
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to make
making
an organization which give all instruction related to
environment
 on d
aily basis.
Suggestion
a daily basis
 In conclusion, people want to protect
e
nvironment but
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the environment, but
the environment but
they do not know what can be done so, they should be aware by educating them and by taking individual responsibility
this
problem
 can be solved.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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