Nowadays men’s sports are given far more attention by society compared to women’s sports. What are the reasons for that? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In recent times, female sporting activities have garnered

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lesser attention than that of their male counterparts. The main reason is that

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male

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is generally promoted more than females

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because they earn more money and they have been around for a longer period.

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, in my opinion,

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is a negative development because it does not reflect

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equality. To start with, male

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generally get more attention because

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men

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sporting activities earn more money than the opposite

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, they are advertised much more than female

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sport

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men

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sport

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has the advantage of a significant head start over that of women,

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men

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has been in the public eye for a longer period.

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, male soccer

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been played publicly for more than 50 years before

female

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started participating; in fact, the first female

world cup

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was held not long ago in 1996.

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, not many people were surprised when male football

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women's soccer by 5.9 billion.

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, in my view,

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is an occurrence to be proud of because it shows our society still has the problem of

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discrimination.

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due to

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the long history of systemic

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as females not being allowed to participate in various activities, no freedom of movement and association)

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on women.

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action has an adverse effect on female competitiveness, making them feel as if they are not up to

men

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, 80% of female athletes

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stop participating in

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to the feeling of being inferior as the reason they dropped out. In conclusion, the major reason for male dominance in

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is the fact that it started earlier than female

sports

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as well as

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the higher level of promotion

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the fact that

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bring significantly more revenue than the opposite sex. In my opinion,

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is a negative development, because it shows we still have the serious problems of

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discrimination.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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4 paragraphs

327 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

professionalized
commercialized
prominence
gender stereotypes
perceptions
visibility
sponsorships
advertising revenue
disparity
media coverage
inequalities
stereotypes
inclusive
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traditional gender norms

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