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What should be done to reduce the Education achivement gap between rich and poor countries?

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Introduction
A few years ago, children from poor countries had nowhere near the same educational achievements as ones from rich co
untrues.
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
Today, the
gap
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 between them is wider than ever before.
Body paragraph 1
The situation is quite serious, but certainly not hopeless. There are many things that different governments can do if they want to shrink the already mentioned
gap
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.
First
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 and foremost, they should invest more in
education
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.
This
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 solution is pretty obvious, but in some countries
education
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 has no funding whatsoever.
Body paragraph 2
With no sufficient funding,
education
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 is bound to worsen. Investing in
education
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 means making different reforms, which means that the educational system is constantly evolving.
However
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, with no funding, it does not evolve. It just freezes in a single place and, with time, becomes heavily outdated and utterly useless.
Body paragraph 3
Another thing they could do is make
education
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 less expensive. The richer the country, the more expensive it
s
the thing named or in question
it
education
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.
However
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, sometimes it is simply ov
erpriced and o
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overpriced, and
nly reachable for students from rich families.
Therefore
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, even if they work harder than others, they won’t get go
od
Suggestion
a good education
education
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.
Body paragraph 4
If
education
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 becomes available for students from every financial background, more people will be able to get higher
education
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.
As a result
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, more of them will establish careers and contribute to the development of the society.
Therefore
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, the
education
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 achievement
gap
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 will start to shrink as well.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I think that there are many ways to reduce the
education
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 achievement
gap
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. What makes the process difficult is that it is extremely delicate and require a lot of time and effort.

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