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Modern lifestyle means that many parents have little time for their children.Manage and run do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. do you agree or disagree?

With regards to technology, it has brought advancement in the field of education and various occupations.Massive of masses trust that in today's era spending
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 with family members has decreased significantly as well as it reduces the awareness among parents and teenagers.I agree with
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 statement, I will elaborate my notions in upcoming fragments with rational conclusion. Ironically enough, to upgrade the financial condition of their families, the work among women has soared, so both parents are doing job together for a long
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 along with them engaged in various occupations,
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they have busy in their entire life.
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they have no enough
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 to take care of their kids,
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, they send their toddlers in kinder gating, it puts a bad impact on their relationship bonding.
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the plethora of youngsters expending their parents it
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 decreasing attentions between parents and children Moving to forward the majority of parents have become addicted computer and T.V, most of
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the time
 they spend in front of the screen.
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they cannot spend
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 together.
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no doubt parents are doing job outside
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times
 they do not say good night to their children because that
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 kids fallen in sleeping
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 they don't understand to each other and always misunderstanding increase every day, youngsters has become easily annoyed from their parents
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it puts down worthless effect on their families. In conclusion, in today's era
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parents have devoid of
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 for their children
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they cannot spend too much
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 together, it puts down worse impact on children as well as parents.

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