Some people think job satisfaction is more important than job security. Other people think one should find a permanent job.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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peolpe
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
are more worried about their
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beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
with the increasing population
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they get
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little
less
chance to get good jobs.Some masses say that
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satisfactory plays vital role in every employee's life rather than
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safety.One the other hand individuals claim that it is more beneficial to search a fixed
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.I will discuss both views in the forthcoming paragraph and give my point of view. To commence with, there are many people who
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want
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job according
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job, according
to their requirements. Masses give more
prefrence
a strong liking
preference
preferences
to those
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job
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jobs
which give them more
relxation
(physiology) the gradual lengthening of inactive muscle or muscle fibers
relaxation
relation
to their mind due to
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reason people can enjoy their
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more.Individuals will be more active when people have no extra burden of their
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,
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they can easily do complete their
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without any stress.In
addtion
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
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people are more willing to do hard
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and give their full time to complete their goals.
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, when people enjoy their they are always ready to do any
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to
boast
increase
boost
the status of their company.
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,
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majority
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the majority
of people say that it is better to find a long-lasting
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.If people have stable
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they are less worried about their future.What is more
,
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,
having a fixed
job
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means have a fixed salary and they can easily set their expenditure with
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montly
of or occurring or payable every month
monthly
payment.As well as
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,
people can do their
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without any worry
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
they have no any fear of loss their
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. To sum up
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
believes
that having a good
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is very
benefiacial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for everyone.
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satisifaction
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
is crucial for both fixed and temporary
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job
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jobs
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
when people are not happy with their
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, they cannot do their with
constraction
the act of constructing something
construction
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