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The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000
#changes #birth #rates #china #usa
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The chart illustrates changes in the
birth
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 rates of
China
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 and the
USA
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 from 1920 to 2000
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, it is obvious that the
rate
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 of
birth
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 in
China
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 and the
USA
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 decreased between 1920 and 2000. The year 1950 saw hit the highest point in the figure for
birth
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both
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China
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 and the
USA
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. The
rate
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 of
birth
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 started
about
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at about
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 10 in
China
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 and started at about 11 in the
USA
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. From 1940 to 1945, there was maintain unchanged of 5 in the proportion of
birth
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 rates in
China
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,
while
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 the figure for
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birth
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 dropped to 4 in the
USA
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. The year 1950 witnessed a considerable rise to 15 in the
rate
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 of
birth
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 in the
USA
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 and 20 in the proportion of
birth
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 in
China
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. There was saw a sharp decline in the
rate
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 of
birth
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 from 1955 to 200. The figure for
birth
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 in
China
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 and the
USA
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 in 2000 were 3 and 7 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, china, usa, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • demographics
  • population control policy
  • One-Child Policy
  • Baby Boom
  • fertility rate
  • census data
  • fluctuations
  • societal norms
  • economic prosperity
  • Great Leap Forward
  • family planning
  • contraception
  • workforce participation
  • aging population
  • urbanization
  • trend analysis
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