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Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. Others say films should have educational value. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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While some people think that watching films is only for leisure time, others believe that films should benefit watchers in terms of education. As far as
this
 is concerned, educational aspects of
film
 productions should not be overshadowed by their entertaining values. It is undeniable that people watch films to seek for entertainment.
Firstly
, people tend to go for films as a means of entertainment as there
is
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are
 a wide variety of
film
 genres for people to choose from depending on personal taste. It ranges from Action movies to Horrible ones, from Science fiction to cartoon to meet demands from all ages
.
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.
Secondly
, most moviegoers expect to recharge themselves after
such
 a stressful period of work or study. As watching films, viewers are able to experience captivating
srceenplay
a script for a film including dialogue and descriptions of characters and sets
screenplay
,
catchy soundtrack
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a catchy soundtrack
 and thrilling performance of the casts which altogether give out
satisfation
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
 that people are looking for.
However
, it is essential for films
to convey
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convey
 educational messages.
Firstly
, watching
film
 is an
amaxing
surprising greatly
amazing
 way to learn languages. As
movie
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the movie
 is
such
 a global industry, films with different origins are now available with
subtitles which, along
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subtitles, which, along
subtitles, which along
 with the hearing the conversation among actors and actresses as native speakers, help with learning a new language.
In addition
, it is advisable for
film makers
a producer of motion pictures
filmmakers
 to include cultural and historical value in their products as a way to broaden the audience’s
knowlegde
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
. Rather than dry and boring dates that students are asked to remember from
school’s curriculum
Suggestion
the school’s curriculum
, lively depicted historical events are more like to
attraction
Suggestion
attract
attracts
attracting
attracted
 people’s attention,
hence
 helping them to absorb the knowledge in a more
effetive
producing or capable of producing an intended result or having a striking effect
effective
 way.
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Suggestion
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 conclusion, movies can both provide educational and entertainment benefits as long as
audience
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an audience
the audience
 know how to take advantage of them.
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