Topic: The maps show the changes of a community center 10 years ago and until the present.

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The maps illustrate the developments which have occurred in a civic

center

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centre

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for 10 years. In general, the community

center

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centre

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in the present is repurposed than 10 years ago .

According to

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the maps, the building had a few structures before it changes

considerately

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considerably

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. First, to the north of the hall, the toilet has been added, making the storage

room

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shrink by half.

Moreover

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, there is a disappearance of the garden in the west,

which

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has

then

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been replaced by an indoor sports area.

Also

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, four office rooms and the storage

room

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in the east of the hall have been cleared to make

room

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for a coffee area.

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while

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the working range has been relocated to the original location of the coffee place, the storage

room

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has been completely destroyed.

On the other hand

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, the 100-seat hall, which is the biggest space, has remained unchanged over the

ten year

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ten-year

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period.

Finally

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, the entrance and reception

field

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fields

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in the south and the southeast of the building have shown no change.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

170 words

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