Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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due to their essential rule in helping their fellows or the opposite due to the negative results of their wealth of their societies.

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to my personal belief that favours the idea of limiting the spending on these people and allocate it in more useful directions. On the one hand, Those who oppose the high payment for celebrities correctly argue about the fact that those famous people display a fake lifestyle which d

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impact on those who try to follow their steps. Another point is that many of these entertainers promote negative habits

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as drugs and high -speed driving or illegitimate spendings on buying brand costumes. History will not forget the h

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event of the group suicide who was promoted by a crazy man, and many of his fans followed him. I believe if these people were not paid as high, they would not be able to do all of

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people or building schools for children in rural areas. When these celebrities use their fame to encourage people to do good to each other, they will have a significant influence in raising human empathy to another level. Take Rolando as an example, when he donated millions to help Syrian children to have shelters

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I strongly believe that funds should not be wasted on these people rather than logic spending.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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338 words

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Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

In numerous nations, there is a growing trend for individuals to frequently discuss financial matters, such as their earnings or expenditures, in everyday conversation. What are the reasons behind this phenomenon?

In many countries children are engaged in some kinf of paid work. Some people regard this a completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people believe that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has ha a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills.to what extent do you agree or disagree?