Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People diverge significantly in their o
pinions whether
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opinions, whether
celebrities income should be h
igh
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higher
due to their essential rule in helping their fellows or the opposite due to the negative results of their wealth of their societies.
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essay will discuss both views
in addition
to my personal belief that favours the idea of limiting the spending on these people and allocate it in more useful directions. On the one hand, Those who oppose the high payment for celebrities correctly argue about the fact that those famous people display a fake lifestyle which d
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does
not apply to the general population and
this
will be of a huge n
egatvie
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
impact on those who try to follow their steps. Another point is that many of these entertainers promote negative habits
such
as drugs and high -speed driving or illegitimate spendings on buying brand costumes. History will not forget the h
eart-breaking
causing or marked by grief or anguish
heartbreaking
event of the group suicide who was promoted by a crazy man, and many of his fans followed him. I believe if these people were not paid as high, they would not be able to do all of
this
. On the other hands, the other party s
ee
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sees
the half full of the cup and
therefore
argue about the fact that celebrities can be great r
ule
the actions and activities assigned to or required or expected of a person or group
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models. They use their wealth in participating in charities
such
as helping the impoverished and u
nprivileg]
e
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people or building schools for children in rural areas. When these celebrities use their fame to encourage people to do good to each other, they will have a significant influence in raising human empathy to another level. Take Rolando as an example, when he donated millions to help Syrian children to have shelters
last
winters, many of his fellows donated as well.
Although
this
was an extraordinary phenomenon, I believe that
this
is the exception and not the rule. In conclusion,
although
the debate about how much m
ony
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
should entertainers make has been o
n going,
currently happening
ongoing
I strongly believe that funds should not be wasted on these people rather than logic spending.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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