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Some people think that drug addicts should be treated like criminals and sent to jail, while others believe that they should be treated like patients and sent hospital. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals argue that imprisonment is an appropriate punishment for drug addicts whereas others agree that they need to be helped and treated as sick people. I believe they should be treated well like a patient who needs to be cured. On the one hand, dealing with addicts like the other criminal cases is to enforce applicable laws. Drugs are prohibited in almost all countries so when someone uses drugs, they will be judged immediately by the law.
For instance
, In Indonesia, heroin abusers may be sentenced for 15 years in jail, even if
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countries, so
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on to consider human being's aspects. Drug addicts may not be well educated, so they tend to use drugs when suffering from depression and anxiety as the one and only way to relive or having no a good social support system attracting them to become heroin users. For
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 reason, addicts in Australia are not automatically committed to the jail, but
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