Some people think that drug addicts should be treated like criminals and sent to jail, while others believe that they should be treated like patients and sent hospital. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals argue that imprisonment is an appropriate punishment for drug addicts whereas others agree that they need to be helped and treated as sick people. I believe they should be treated well like a patient who needs to be cured. On the one hand, dealing with addicts like the other criminal cases is to enforce applicable laws. Drugs are prohibited in almost all countries so when someone uses drugs, they will be judged immediately by the law.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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