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People should be responsible for pollution problem caused by transportation, while others think government should be held accountable.Discuss about both the views and give your opinion

In today's era, one of the grievous concerns experienced by us is
pollution
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, courtesy transportation that
fuels
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fuel
 in majority of toxic particles in the atmosphere.The accountability to
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 issue is a contentious. Undoubtedly, humans have immensely contributed in proliferating
pollution
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 level over the years. Excessive
use
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 of private vehicles can be stated as one of the major factors contributing to it.
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, shunning public transport and avoiding car pooling in the favourable circumstances has exacerbated the problem. Aggravating the problem, people are using old vehicles which are not maintained as per the standards resulting in the emission of toxic gases that are harmful for the environment,
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 causing extensive air
pollution
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.According to the experts, expired and old vehicles are responsible for more than 50 percent of the
pollution
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 caused by transportation.
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,
government
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 accountability should not be avoided as well.The reason people tend to
use
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 private vehicles because of inadequate connectivity of public transport.
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 to it, public means of transport are not as comfortable and convenient as private vehicles which deters people from using it.
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,
government
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 is responsible for making stringent laws and ensuring that every individual is abiding by the laws.
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, negligence of
government
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 officials to enforce existing laws is
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 one of the supreme reason for environmental
pollution
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 caused by transportation. In the nutshell, there is an equal responsibility of the citizens as well as the
government
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 to take
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 issue seriously and act towards it.While, citizens should
use
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 private vehicles only in emergency situations,
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government
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the government
 should
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 come up with innovative ideas to restrain
use
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 of private vehicles.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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