The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

The 2 pie charts illustrate the average expenses in a country on household categories in the years 1950 and 2010.

Overall

Linking Words

, at the beginning of the

period

Use synonyms

, a significant share of total expenses was spent on housing ,

however

Linking Words

, in comparison with the end of the

period

Use synonyms

it considerably decreased and was overtaken by

food

Correct article usage

the food

show examples

category

Use synonyms

Conversely

Linking Words

,the expenditure on health care constituted the least in both periods. With regard to housing, in 1950 it accounted for just under three-quarters of total expenditure,

Linking Words

nevertheless

Add a comma

,nevertheless

show examples

after over 6 decades the number experienced a more than threefold decrease to approximately a fifth,

however

Linking Words

on the contrary

Linking Words

, food comprised only 11.2% in 1950 and experienced a large increase up to 34% in 2010.

Likewise

Linking Words

transportation

Correct article usage

the transportation

show examples

category

Use synonyms

composed only 3.3% at the beginning and rose to less than a fifth In 2010.

On the other hand

Linking Words

, over the

period

Use synonyms

given

health care

Correct your spelling

healthcare

show examples

category

Use synonyms

constituted 2.4% at the beginning and almost doubled to one in twenty in 2010.

Linking Words

Also

Add a comma

,Also

show examples

education

category

Use synonyms

did not experience much of a difference in the

period

Use synonyms

given, only a mere 0.3% decrease from 6.6% to 6.3% Another point that should be highlighted is that the amount of money spent on other items was roughly one in twenty at the start,

Linking Words

nonetheless

Add a comma

,nonetheless

show examples

in the

second

Linking Words

year it rose to almost a fifth.

Sat May 02 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words period, category with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

▼

10
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

219 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6.5
band
The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library's manager, in your letter include: -A brief introduction of yourself -Your experience and relevant skills. -Why you want the job
My name is Ruxshona.I am in the 9th grade ,I am fifteen years old I am studying English at a Bukhara school.I am interested in this subject and in the future, I want to become a translator or an English teacher.I saw the news of working in this library on TV when it was announced and I am writing about your place of work.
6.5
band
As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice?
Nowadays, popular languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin are becoming widespread around the world, there is a fear that minority languages will become extinct. Some countries have begun to take steps to protect these minority languages. Personally, I completely agree with this idea, we need it .Let's consider the issue carefully.
6.5
band
Some people think that housing facilities should be built in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while others believe that parks should be set instead. Planting trees is very important for the environment. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Some individuals believe that housing should be constructed in the empty areas of cities and towns. However, others agree that instead there should be parks building housing facilities in free areas that have less damage planting trees which is crucial for the environment. I would agree that we should not dwell in vacant areas . This essay will explain why there should be no construction efforts in unoccupied areas.
7
band
Q. Some people say that web content should be used to instruct children. Others think that it is not helpful in an educational setting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
These days, people are reconsidering the value of web-based education. There are many people who think that web content should not be used to instruct children in recent years, while some people with a more positive view of educational web content strongly disagree with that idea, saying that using web content as education should be used. Personally, I think that we should use that web content to teach children.
6
band
Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.
There is an ever increasing use of technology, such as tablets and laptops, in the classroom. It is often argued that this is a positive development, whilst others disagree and think it will lead to adverse ramifications. This essay agrees that an increase in technology is beneficial to students and teachers. This essay will discuss both points of view.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010

The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library's manager, in your letter include: -A brief introduction of yourself -Your experience and relevant skills. -Why you want the job

As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice?

Q. Some people say that web content should be used to instruct children. Others think that it is not helpful in an educational setting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.