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Some people think that schools should involve students in school management. Do you agree or disagree with this idea? Give reasons for your answer.

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According to some people students should be allowed to be a part of the
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 team because it will enable them to gain valuable skills. I completely disagree with
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 statement because pupils are not mature enough to play the crucial role of managing the
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 activities.
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, they should not be burdened with extra responsibilities. To commence with, one of the obvious reasons for not including students in the
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 team is that they are at their learning stage and do not have the maturity to handle
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 roles. Their priorities will always be focused on their own interest rather than the necessity. To illustrate, if the student representatives do not like games, they will not be in the favour of having sports activities in the curriculum. Another reason not to involve students in managerial activities is that their syllabus is already heavy and they cannot waste any time for running the
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. They are already occupied with studying their core subjects and sparing time for these tasks may have an adverse impact on their studies.
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,
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 years are not the perfect time for students to learn the
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 skills when they do not even know the difference between good and evil.
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, gaining academic knowledge should be their prime objective in
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 rather than becoming a part of the
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. To conclude, the argument that students should take part in
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 activities does not hold water because pupils at
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 age cannot do justice to
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 role.
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, these extra responsibilities may affect their studies.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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