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You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear •Explain why you lost contact with your friend •Say how you want them to help you to get back in touch

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter in reference to an article that was published in "The Times" on July 10, 2024. It was the third edition of
this
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 book, written by Dr. Simran Kaur.
This
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 article attracted me because after reading it thoroughly, I realized it was written by my schoolmate who is not in my contact anymore. My friend and I lost contact in 2010, her family decided to move to a big city
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 her father's promotion and demanding life.
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, mobiles or computers were not ubiquitous during those days and we got separated.
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, her memories never got deleted from my mind. I remember, she always wanted to become a love writer since her childhood days. I would be obliged if you could provide me with the email address that was utilised to send you
this
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 information. I have a burning desire in my heart to contact her and catch up again. I hope you understand and consider it. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.
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coherence cohesion
Your letter is clear and well-structured. However, you can enhance the logical flow between paragraphs by using more linking words or phrases.
coherence cohesion
To further improve your writing, you might consider including a brief concluding sentence that summarizes your main points before the closing.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task comprehensively, explaining when and where the article was published, why you lost contact with your friend, and how you want the editor to help.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is appropriate and polite, fitting well with the purpose of writing to an editor.
coherence cohesion
Your paragraphs are well-structured, with each focusing on a single idea, which enhances readability.
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