Some people think that International students exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students.Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

Often
,
Accept space
,
it is said that sending students
abroad especially
Accept comma addition
abroad, especially
young ones within
international students exchange offer
Suggestion
the international students exchange offer
could be more advantageous. Undoubtedly,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe
this
offer can have
positive effect
Suggestion
a positive effect
positive effects
on
scholar's mentality
Suggestion
the scholar's mentality
towards other students and
intellectuals
Suggestion
intellectual
skills.
This
will discuss both the influences.
First
and foremost thing could be noticed in children's attitude towards their classmates. Moving foreign lead learner's
to understand
Suggestion
understanding
completely others
,
Accept space
,
so that they could live in that city
.
Accept space
.
By doing so, they get
more aware
Suggestion
more awareness
as well as more familiar to live safely. Surprisingly dealing with situations boost their self confidence and strong personality to face the challenges.
Such
as in
US
Suggestion
the US
most of the students
dropout
Suggestion
drop out
the schools
anc
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
move back to their countries, only because they didn't like atmosphere of schools and sometimes become
victim
Suggestion
victims
a victim
the victim
of bullying.
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Example:

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  • Finally
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  • Global awareness
  • Interconnected
  • Competitive edge
  • Cultural shock
  • Prohibitive
  • Inequality
  • Adaptability
  • Fosters
  • Enhance
  • Communication abilities
  • Personal growth
  • Accessibility
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