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During our careers, we work with many different kinds of people. All of them have unique characteristics and personality traits. In your opinion, which of the following is the most important characteristic of a coworker? • a serious attitude regarding their work obligations • a willingness to learn new things • the ability to make other people laugh

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It’s
quiet
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
 hard to find a job which
satisfy
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satisfies
 all needs of
person
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the person
a person
people
persons
. People want to have a high salary, good
work
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 conditions, pleasant co-workers and understanding
boss
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. Having a nice chief is quite important, because
bad attitude
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the bad attitude
 to a person may
has
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have
 a detrimental effect on someone’s mental state. In my opinion, good
boss
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 is someone who is experienced.
Experienced
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The experienced boss
boss
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 knows how to communicate and interact with his/ her employees and knows how to manage difficult situations at
work
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 as well.
For example
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,
work
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 in a laboratory requires skills. Conducting a research is hard
work
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 and usually the results are unpredictable. When you are a young scientist, you feel frustrated when
experiment
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the experiment
an experiment
 fails.
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Therefore it
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Therefore, it
 is crucial to have an experienced supervisor, who is eager to help you because she
/
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he had coped with problems like these before. It seems that
boss
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 with great experience is not so ambitious. Usually an ambitious
boss
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 is young and she
/
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he overestimates oneself. They are arrogant and treat people in a bad way. They want to show their supremacy by humiliating employees by psychological terror. I think that experienced
boss
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 may be strict and demanding, but he
/
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she knows from his
/
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her experience that bad attitude to workers would be detrimental
for
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to
work
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 process.
Furthermore
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, experienced
boss
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 understands human nature better and can distinguish good and bad worker. We often face justice at
work
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. Our colleagues may use
results
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the results
 of our
work
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 and pretend to be diligent workers in the eyes of our
boss
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. In
situation
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situations
a situation
 like
this
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, it is hard to prove that you are right, but experienced
boss
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 can
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 better and you can rely on his
/
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her help. In conclusion, good
boss
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 makes pleasant atmosphere at
work
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, which increases productivity of
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work process
Suggestion
the work process
. The main quality of
good s
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good
goods
boss
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 is
experience
Suggestion
an experience
 which helps to run the company and command the workers properly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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