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Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • thank your friend • explain how useful the present is • arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon

#friend #birthday #party
Dear Venu, How are you doing? I am writing
this
 letter to express my happiness about my recent birthday.
First
 of all, thank you so much for coming all the way from
the
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London to attend
the
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my 30th birthday. It was
a
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 immense pleasure to have all my friends and family relatives on that day, especially you because of the one and only close friend since my childhood. I am extremely happy with the expensive OLED smart television as a gift.
Last
 month, I was planned to purchase that new version of that OLED but due to
lack
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 of budget for that
month
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 I could not able to
buy
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. For me, it's kind of a dual purpose, like a TV as well as a computer screen. With that smart TV, most of my office work I can able to deliver. If you don't
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, let me know your free time for
this
 weekend so that we will meet and discuss the various upcoming events. It's been a long time since we
last
 met for the discussion. Best Regards Meera Shareef

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sincerely appreciate
  • generous gift
  • means a lot
  • truly grateful
  • thoughtfulness
  • perfect timing
  • came in handy
  • can't thank you enough
  • catch up soon
  • make plans to meet
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