Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justifed while others think it is unfair.

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IT IS POSSIBLE THAT THE EARNINGS OF

SPORTS

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PROFESSIONALS

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CAN BE HIGHER COMPARED WITH OTHER BRANCHES OF OTHER MAJOR

PROFESSIONS

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WHILE

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SOME THINK THAT THESE SPORTSMEN AND SPORTSWOMEN DO NOT DESERVE WHAT THEY GAIN, OTHERS CONTEMPLATE THAT ALL OF THEM SHOULD BE CONSIDERED EQUAL AND THERE IS NO UNFAIRNESS. I PARTIALLY SUPPORT THESE VIEWS, BECAUSE ALL OF THEM HAVE THEIR OWN DIFFICULTY.

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WITH, FOR SOME PEOPLE,

SPORTS

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SHOULD NOT EARN MUCH MONEY COMPARED TO OTHERS.

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DUE TO

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THE FACT THAT USING THEIR PHYSICAL POWERS OR BODIES SHOULD NOT BE CONSIDERED EQUAL AND WAGES WHICH ARE PREPARED FOR

SPORTS

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PROFESSIONALS

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SHOULD BE LESS THAN OTHER SECTORS OF

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FOR INSTANCE

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, TODAY, FOOTBALL AND BASKETBALL PLAYERS ARE THE MOST VALUABLE

SPORTS

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PROFESSIONALS

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WHICH

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AND

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EVEN EARN MORE THAN ALL

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. FOR THAT REASON, MORE AND MORE PEOPLE COMPLAIN THAT USING ONLY THEIR FEET OR HANDS SHOULD NOT BE MORE VALUABLE AS OTHER

PROFESSIONS

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FURTHERMORE

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, OTHERS INFORM THAT EARNING MORE THAN OTHER

PROFESSIONALS

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ARE RIGHT AND BECOMING SPORTSMEN AND SPORTSWOMEN HAVE MORE DIFFICULTIES.

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BECAUSE IN SOME PARTS OF THE SPORT, PLAYING OR FIGHTING CAN CAUSE DEATH DANGER AND IMPORTANT INJURIES.

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THE RESEARCH FROM THE INTERNATIONAL SPORT ACADEMY OF CALIFORNIA, INFORM THAT EARNING MONEY UNLIKE OTHER SECTORS OF

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, HAS SOME REASONS.

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, THEY CAN PUT AN END TO THEIR LIVES OR WILL HAVE PERMANENT DAMAGE BECAUSE OF STRICT HITS IN MATCHES TO EARN A HIGH SALARY.

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, SOME CAN REJECT THAT PAY FOR

SPORTS

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PROFESSIONALS

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SHOULD NOT BE HIGH AS OTHER

PROFESSIONS

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, BUT SOME SUPPORT THEM FOR EARNING HIGH WAGES BECAUSE OF MORE DANGERS THAN OTHER

PROFESSIONS

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Ensure your introduction sets the context more clearly and state your viewpoint more distinctly. This will help the reader understand your stance from the beginning.

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Develop your main points with more specific examples and detailed explanations to strengthen your arguments and make your essay more persuasive.

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Use a wider range of cohesive devices and transitional phrases to link ideas more smoothly and help guide the reader through your essay. This will improve the flow and logic of your argumentation.

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Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single main idea. This helps in structuring your essay more logically and making it easier for the reader to follow.

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Avoid writing entirely in uppercase letters, as it makes the essay harder to read and can be perceived as shouting. Use standard capitalization rules for a more professional and reader-friendly presentation.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

273 words

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Your opinion

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