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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
In the modern era of time
use
 of
internet
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the internet
 is rising. A majority group of people is buying grains, home serving instruments, reading materials, tickets booking etc.
by
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By
 using
internet
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the internet
. According to my opinion
use
 of
internet
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the internet
 is more beneficial to society. My arguments are discussed in the following paragraphs. Due to
this
 busy life style people does not have a time to visit
such
 shops for buying daily needed things. So, that people are selecting way of buying things with a single click.
Furthermore
, people can compare the prices of the same items without visiting the shopping centre or shops. As per my knowledge, market will become an open for customers and everything is easily available with a wide range of product by using the
internet
. In other hand,
for example
 price of air tickets are available far away just a single click
also
, we can compare the price of different airlines.
Use
 of
internet
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the internet
 has its own cons.
Firstly
, we cannot check the quality of products while purchasing online. Some time seller may cheat to customers,
also
 with
delivered
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delivering
 a wrong products or low quality product.
Secondly
, a small scale group of companies may not survive in the world of competition. To conclude,
use
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the use
 of
internet
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the internet
 is more suitable by seeing a
such
 situation of the world. But, educated people can
use
 it with high efficiency on other hand uneducated people may face some trouble while using a
such
 modern facilities. There should have a strict guidelines relating to trading with the help of
internet
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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