In Britain , when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care.Who do you think should pay for this care , government or the family

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One of the most challenging
problem
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problems
of today's society is the who should pay for the old generation after they retired. Some think that government
have
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has
to pay for them while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
said that they have to stay with their families to look after them.
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, The
person
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who
work
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works
his whole life and pay
tax
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taxes
to
government
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the government
when he is working.
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also
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become
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becoming
some efforts in the development of country After doing
this
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all they need some benefits from the
govenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
.
For
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example pensions
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example, pensions
Medical benefits or Free old
age
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homes if they need.
On the other hand
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,
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,
The
person
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who did hard work in his life to maintain the family.
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, Both husband and wife working to buy the house and
then
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they send their children to schools
,
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,
colleages
the body of faculty and students of a college
colleges
colleagues
or to universities for their bright future. All the expense paid by the parents. So, At the end of the day they only need that their children look after them in their old
age
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or after the retirement.
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Most
People cannot live without their children.
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, the
person
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who
live
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lives
in
old
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an old age home
age
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home is not feel good as
compare
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compared
to the
person
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who live in
family
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families
a family
. In Add to
next
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,
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,
I think that may be nurses are more
puntual
acting or arriving or performed exactly at the time appointed
punctual
to
gave
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give
medicines or to look after them.Nurses take care of old people very well because they have
a
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an
experience of all.
but
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But
they always feel bored
in
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with
old
age
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home In my thought of way, I believe that old people can stay with their families and family have to pay for them.
and
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And
take care of them
.
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.
but
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But
In some cares old people
donot
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do not
have somebody to look after the
then
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their
in or at that place
there
-is a responsibility to pay for their expenses as old
age
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homes or their other needs.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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