the table below illustrate UK participation in selected sports by gender between 2005/06 and 2008/09

the table below illustrate UK participation in selected sports by gender between 2005/06 and 2008/09
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The table chart below shows the percentages of optional sports participation between males and females from 2005/06 to 2008/09.
Overall
,
it is clear that
indoor activities were the highest popular sports, meanwhile jogging and running sports experienced the lowest proportion of choices of
men
and
women
.
In addition
, the percentage of cycling sport in
men
was about two times higher than in
women
. From 2005/06 to 2008/09, participation in swimming and diving had the most impressive number, especially, the number of
female
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always higher than male. In 2005/06 and 2008/09, there were 18.0% and 16.5% in
women
compared to 13.3% and 13% in
men
respectively.
In contrast
, the participation in jogging and running was the smallest number, which was under 5% in
women
and 8% in the remained one
as well as
there was not any significant difference between
two
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genders.
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Cycling activities, which were selected by
men
, were almost two times higher than in
women
. In 2006/07 and 2007/08, the percentages of male attendance were 13.3% and 13.8% in comparison to 6.8% and 6.5% of opposite participants respectively .
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