The bar chart provides information about how many visitors who came to art galleries in six different countries in 2011

The bar chart provides information about how many visitors who came to art galleries in six different countries in 2011
The bar chart shows how many people visited art galleries in 6 countries around the world in 2011. In general, the data can be divided into 2 groups: one with
rather
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high number of visitors includes museums
of
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France, the USA and the UK
while
the other contains countries which have modest statistics. As can be clearly seen from the chart, the people visiting
Louvre
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museum
made up the vast majority of visitors with just under 9
millions
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. The
second
most destination was Metropolitan in America with 6 million and it was followed closely by British
Museum
in the UK.
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numbers of Korea, Spain and Russia were quite humble. Far fewer people, roughly 1/3 the counts of France, came to visit
National
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the National
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Museum
of Korea.
Similarly
, Museo del Prado
Museum
in Spain had
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smaller number of tourists with 3 million and the least popular place was State Hermitage
Museum
in Russia with slightly below 3 million.
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