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Visiting a friend whom you have not spoken to since quite long

#friend
Dear Anna, How are you? It has been quite long since we have met or spoken to each other. I remember the
last
 time we spoke to each other was
couple
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a couple
 of years before when you had moved from New York to California after getting married. How has the
city
 been treating you. I am sure you must have been
well
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good
-settled with your family. After we spoke, I was struggling to switch my job. Luckily, I got a job
in
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at
with
 Microsoft and I too moved to Seattle
an
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a
 year ago. Life since
then
 has been very hectic.
An
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A
 new
city
, different surroundings, different culture. It took me
sometime
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some time
 to get adapted to
this
city
. Now I am in love with
this
city
. I did solo
travelling
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travels
 to some beautiful places in and around Seattle. I do miss home and my parents. Luckily I found some good roommates and very friendly
peersin
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peers in
office
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the office
. It
isbeacuse
 of them I never have felt that void which I always feared of having on living away from my parents. Microsoft has given me great opportunities and one of them is the
schlorship
financial aid provided to a student on the basis of academic merit
scholarship
 to pursue my dream of withholding a Doctorate Degree in the field of Data analytics. To chase of
dream
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the dream
a dream
, I am travelling to
Califonia
a state in the western United States on the Pacific; the 3rd largest state; known for earthquakes
California
 in a couple of months. I am travelling as of now just to make some arrangements for starting a living in California. My
todo
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to do
 list is too long. The priority
being finding
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have found
a
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an
accomodation
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodation
that is
 in near proximity to my University.
This
 might just take a few days. But since I am travelling to California, I thought of meeting you and spending some time with you.
Lets
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Let's
 relive our old days when we used to be travel buddies. I am planning to visit some places near California. I am very excited to meet you. Hope to see you soon. Best wishes Clara

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