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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. ​Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. ​Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the proportion of men and
women
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 teachers in 6 various types of
educational
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the educational
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setting
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. It is interesting to mention that there was a wide disparity between men and
women
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 in nursery and
university
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. The highest quantity for
women
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 and men
were
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 reported at nursery and
university
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, respectively. There was a dramatic decrease between the
figures
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of
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for
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 males and females
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in pre-school
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pre-school
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preschool
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, with the former standing first with approximately 90% The disparity between the
figures
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were
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 equal at secondary school and private training institute. Considering that
women
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 were ranked first
at
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in
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pre-school
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preschool
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 and primary school, they
are
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experienced a substantial
fall off
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 at the
university
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.
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hand
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 males experienced a considerable rise from 10% at nursery and rated first at the
university
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 with
the
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figures
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 of about 65-70%. One more interesting example is that the percentage of knowledge both for males and females
were
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 equal at the college. And
after
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this
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figures
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 of
women
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 slightly fell off.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, university, figures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Distribution
  • Gender disparities
  • Educational settings
  • Predominance
  • Representation
  • Societal biases
  • Systemic biases
  • Recruitment
  • Accessibility
  • Work-life balance
  • Societal expectations
  • Perceived suitability
  • Efforts to balance
  • Gender equality
  • Policymakers
  • Educational leaders
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