The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Hospitals and medical centres are stressed because of the increasing number of people who have an unhealthy
weight
. Certain individuals believe that the best way to manage
this
issue is to have more physical education (
PE
) classes at
school
Paraphrase. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
this
idea because
diet
Suggestion
the diet
a diet
has the biggest impact on a students’
weight
. There are reasons why I argue that
diet
has a bigger impact on one’s health than exercise during
PE
class.Topic Sentence
First
of all, it is easier to improve our health by changing our
diet
than doing more
PE
classes.Supporting Idea
For instance
, overweight students can simply eat less fat and sugar.
Evidence
Furthermore
, it takes a lot of time to burn calories, which can consume in minutes.Supporting Idea So any benefits to a student’s health from a
PE
class can be cancelled out by simply eating a Snickers bar.
Evidence
Hence
, schools should actively promote healthier diets to their students to help them to lose
weight
rather than adding more
PE
classes.Topic Sentence Most importantly, schools can ensure that only healthy food is served in the
school
canteen.Supporting Idea
For example
, food
that is
high in fat, sugar or salt should be banned.
Evidence
In addition
, lessons on a balanced
diet
should be given during
school
time.Supporting Idea
Such
lessons should teach students about the dangers of obesity and how to maintain a healthy
weight
.
Evidence
In conclusion, having more
PE
classes isn’t the best way to address the problem of obesity.Conclusion If I were a
school
principal, I would introduce a healthier menu at the
school
canteen
instead
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity rates
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • instill
  • long term
  • raise awareness
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • nutritional education
  • active transport
  • quality of instruction
  • facilities and equipment
  • diet control initiatives
  • community sports programs
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