Many students take part time jobs whilst studying in university. Is it a good idea or bad idea?

These days, the overwhelming majority of juniors 
works
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work
are working
during their tertiary education. I personally feel
that is
positive trend
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a positive trend
among young generation.
Hence
, I will explain my viewpoints through examples.    
First
and foremost, on of the beneficial side having a
job
 during studies a person
introduce
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introduces
with
adult world
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an adult world
the adult world
,
Accept space
,
this
probably teach
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probably teaches
 
individual certain skill
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individual certain skills
the individual certain skill
For instance
, working in a customer
sevice
work done by one person or group that benefits another
service
 field, young people might become more accurate in conversations and learn how handle with the problematic visitors without arguing.
Secondly
, a student
migh
expresses possibility
might
may
be independent from parents, due to they will have
regular salary
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a regular salary
. While, spending the money they could learn how to use it properly.  
Moreover
, there are many people who are doing part time jobs with their studies become more punctual and complete their task beyond the deadlines.
This
type of characteristics not only welcomed by many of the employers, but
also
give the opportunity to employees to start their career after the completion of their graduation which offers high incentives. Step by step they will
involved
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involve
in real life and develop into
resposible adult
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responsible adults
responsible adult
a responsible adult
.Another valuable side is personal growth, working in a team boost confidence in a person and enhance communication skills with the others.
Finally
, who takes a part-time
job
 will be successful in
internship
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an internship
the internship
by profession, because they already have had
job
 experience.    To conclude, it is useful
expirience
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
 which
improves
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will improve
their
perfomance
a dramatic or musical entertainment
performance
performances
in the future.
Also
, part time
job
during university education gives an opportunity to grow into rounded person and earn some income to bear the burden in private life
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