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In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

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In the current decade, there has been heated debate that animals should not be used for rudimentary requirements of human beings. I partially agree with
this
 statement. There are numerous organisations, who are fighting for the ethical treatment with animals and ban on killing these creatures for our benefit. While there is still a need to find alternatives in the field of medicinal research.
To begin
 with, vegetables contain an equal proportion of vitamins and proteins in comparison to animal flesh. Researchers have found that people who follow a vegan diet are much healthier than the ones who consume non-vegetarian food.
For instance
, many sportsmen who follow vegetarian diet show a tremendous increase in their performance and stamina.
Moreover
, in the majority of the parts of the world, stern laws have been implemented by the governments and the usage of animal skin for clothing is now a punishable offence.
On the contrary
, it is worthwhile to mention that multifarious developments have been seen in the field of medicinal research,
however
, scientists are not able to find any alternatives to the utilisation of animals in clinical trials for testing of new drugs.
Nevertheless
, with the increased intervention of welfare organisations like PETA, it is expected that the use of animals for experiments will surely diminish in future years.
Additionally
, doctors are not able to invent any supplement to replace the use of aquatic species
such
 as fish are still used to produce medicines like fish oil, which has enormous benefits to human health. To recapitulate, I do not fully agree that it is not necessary to utilize animals for human consumption as there are a plethora of creatures killed by medical researchers for testing and production of numerous medicines.
However
, a downward trend has been witnessed on consumption of animals in order to meet the fundamental necessities of the layman by the increased influence of animal activists.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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