At the present time, the population of some countries includes relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of old people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the

morden

belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages

modern

times, the figure about the younger is larger than older ones. There is no doubt that

this

phenomenon has its drawback as well as merits. From my point of view, the advantages

outweight

be heavier than

outweigh

the drawbacks for several reasons. It is obvious that these are

varous

of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity

various

disadvantages that they may face with

young

Suggestion

the younger

population.

Firstly

, it is considered that the portion of

crimine

someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime

criminal

in some countries rises more as most offenders are youngsters.

Secondly

, the rising number of unemployment in

labour market

Suggestion

the labour market

has influenced and caused some economic and

enviroment

the totality of surrounding conditions

environment

issues which government have to strictly take tackle. We can consider the taxes and the aid to support for unemployed people.

However

, there are

also

various benefits which

outweight

be heavier than

outweigh

disadvantages that people can gain from

this

tendency. The

first

positive perspective is young adults playing

Suggestion

vital role in economy of countries. It means that they are the main factor who be responsible to earn money and

also

are well-educated ones to develop their education.

Another

Suggestion

Other

added benefits

Suggestion

are

that Youngsters always have a good immune system compared to older ones which reduce the money invested

for

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healthcare

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health care

per years.A good case in point is

Italy which

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Italy, which

having old population suffered more death cases in the recent

epandemic

a widespread outbreak of an infectious disease; many people are infected at the same time

epidemic

Covic -19 compared to Asian countries with youngster are

majority

Suggestion

the majority

. Drawing to conclusion, The merits of

this

phenomenon

outweight

be heavier than

outweigh

outweighed

the drawbacks as we put it into some perspectives of countries

such

as economy, social or

education

Suggestion

educational

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of old people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In many countries, art galleries visitors have been declining steadily. What are the possible reason? how to change this trend?

Nowadays, there is trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it iss harmfull to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?